DA Fanfic: Powerless

[scarylady]

I've finally caved and posted my entry for the DA Asunder Creative Writing Challenge on FF. Today is the day that Bioware are to announce the winners, and if nothing else is capable of distracting me, reviews certainly would.  All feedback gratefully received.

*goes back to chewing fingernails*

Title: Powerless
Word Count: 2500
Rating: suitable for all, I think.
Summary:

For six generations the Laurentius family bred true; mage marrying mage to create a line of powerful Magisters. In Tevinter high society, if one is not a mage, then one is a liability, at the mercy of predatory Magisters and their… pets.

At fifteen, Livia Laurentius - daughter of Magister Lucretius and his powerful wife Cornelia - has demonstrated not a single spark of magic. Her future hangs in the balance; her parents are a hairsbreadth from sending her to Orlais for her own safety.

Lucretius sees no alternative, but Cornelia has an audacious idea.

It’s time for drastic measures.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7795465/1/


EDITED SOME HOURS LATER:   I  made the top five!  Woohoo!!!

EDITED AGAIN NEXT DAY:  FF have now got their act together and the story link should be working again.  Sorry to mess you all around!

Comments

[zevgirl]

OMG. must you rip my heart out so early in the day? This was fabulous. I'm on my phone but had to say something. I'll review of FF later. :)

[scarylady]

*grin* I live to rip out hearts. *passes zevgirl some consolatory chocolate*

[brynna]

So awesome! I read Miri's entry too, and you both put me to shame. Well done! Hope you win!

[scarylady]

Fingers crossed that someone off this comm wins. We have so many talented people, and we'll celebrate like mad if one of them pulls off this coup!

[kelcat]

Left my somewhat garbled review on ffnet, but I thought I'd chime in to say that the Bioware blog is going to have an enormously high hit count today due to the fact that I keep checking it every five minutes!

[scarylady]

I know! I've been determinedly playing SWTOR, but even so I keep stopping every 15 mins or so to check the thread on the forums.

Luvverly reviews of my story are cheering me up at least. Thank you! :D

[kelcat]

They're up, they're up, they're up! I sadly didn't make it into the top 20, but I saw some familiar names!

[scarylady]

I made the top 5! *dances*

[kelcat]

I know! I'm so, so proud of you! You definitely deserved it for that story.

I'm much better at writing character studies than action, so I'm definitely in awe of writers that can pull off such powerful pieces (especially in 2500 words or less!)

[jessicajones]

Congrats on making the final five!!

[scarylady]

Thank you! To make the final 5 out of 400 entries... I feel quite proud :)

[jessicajones]

I thought you might - it's such a cool idea! Also, you're awesome.

Reading it now...

[msbarrows]

CONGRATS! Just saw the results - way to go!

[zevgirl]

Woot!!!!!!! Yay, girl!

[scarylady]

*blush* Aw thanks. I'm grinning like a loon.

[zevgirl]

I bet! I had a feeling you'd be there when I read it, honestly. I'm so happy for all the folks in the top 20 too.

[brynna]

Gratz!!!!! So happy for you!

[darkrose]

Gratz darling!

[scarylady]

*hugs* Thank you, m'dear. For story-swapping with me for mutual support and just generally being an awesome friend.

[miri1984]

HIGHLY DESERVED!!!

[scarylady]

Thanks hun. Thank you so much for reading it through at the time, I explode messily if I don't have some outlet! *hug*

[sierralie]

Congratulations! I'll admit I was not one bit surprised to see your name in the final five, with the quality of your writing. I really enjoyed this story!

[scarylady]

Aw, that's a lovely thing to say. Thank you!

CONGRATS!!!

[tgcgoddess]

Yay! I'm so excited for you!

But, did you pull the story off ff.net? I tried to go read it, and it says Story Not Found Unable to locate story with id of 7795465

I'd love to read it, because I know I'll love it, because, well, duh, you wrote it!

Re: CONGRATS!!!

[scarylady]

It's still there, I've edited it, re-saved it, done everything I can short of deleting and reposting it >:

I don't want to have to re-post, as I already have a bunch of reviews.

It's not the first time this has happened, but it's been a while since FF flaked out on me. Hopefully it'll reappear again in a short while, but FF didn't 'alf pick their moment, right?

Re: CONGRATS!!!

[tgcgoddess]

Well, stink bugs, it still isn't working for me. I even tried it from your main page, and it shows the blurb, but I can't open the story or the reviews. I guess I'll try again later. A pox upon them.

*pouts

Re: CONGRATS!!!

[scarylady]

Story's back up! Stupid FF finally came through.

Re: CONGRATS!!!

[tgcgoddess]

Thanks for the heads up; I just left you a review there.

AWESOME STORY!!!!

[the_morningstar616]

Well done! :-)

[seven_corbies]

Well butter my butt and call me a biscuit!!! Congrats, woman!

[amhran_comhrac]

Woo! Congrats!!!!

and damn ffnet! "Unable to locate story with id of 7795465." >:(
Grrrr.

[scarylady]

They're driving me daft. For once, practically the entire bloody fandom wants to read my stuff and FF have to pick this moment and this story to bugger up.

[scarylady]

It's finally back up.

[feckless_muse]

Woot! Congrats! *hug*

Well done :D

[solitae]

Congrats! That's awesome!

Damn, still can't read it :(

[scarylady]

It's finally back up.

[nightsfury]

This is an awesome piece of writing. I love the ending, very nice twist. And congratulations on placing in the top five. This story deserves it. Good luck for the final selection.

[scarylady]

FF let you into the story? I still can't get to the damned thing.

This was the final selection, hun. The top 20, the top 5 and the winner were announced simultaneously. David Gaider liked my story well enough to place it in the top 5; I'm happy with that :)

[nightsfury]

Ah, sorry, didn't realize that. But still, so very cool.
I read the story yesterday, then had to run to meet up with my daughter. I didn't have any trouble getting into FF. Haven't tried it today it yet.

[taisin]

Wow! Congrats!

[scarylady]

Thank you! Story link should now be working again if you're curious enough to read it.

[the_morningstar616]

Just managed to get into the link to read it now, and I'm not surprised you did so well, it's a fantastic story. :-)

[scarylady]

Thank you! I don't consider it to be my best work, by any means (the word constraints held me back somewhat), but I'm very, very pleased to have been selected.

[ashfae]

Absolutely terrific story, Scary. Well-deserved accolades for you. =)

[scarylady]

Thank you, hun! I'm now buried in Sugar and Spice, trying to get it finished before tomorrow's deadline. I didn't pick a terribly easy one :S

[ashfae]

Ditto. Mine should be easy, but my smut brain is refusing to come out and play, to my immense annoyance. Bah!

[scarylady]

ALL my smut ideas were for SS, and at that point I may as well just sign the damn thing and have done with it. Therefore, to preserve anonymity, I'm writing sugar. This is not a thing I find easy.